Made in a day.
Fastest in the Forest puts a fresh spin on an old story.
You play as the Hare, attempting to outrun the tortoise.
It may not be as easy as it sounds.
Can you outrun a tortoise?
Suck it, tortoise! I beat that slow-ass fool! Nice twist on a familiar story.
Nice music, by the way :).
The music catched me immediately (listening to it like the 50ths time :D), great take on that! I like the different activities you can parttake in besides the race, like the (haunted?) house, fishing or the forest. They feel a little bit like side quests to a large adventure.
The storytelling is done in a nice way and comes directly to the point and the language is easy to understand.
Some things you could improve on (I know, I know, one day ;) ):
You could make the text appear not at once but one character after the other (don't forget to make that skippable for the impatient fellows).
Also you could use different text effects, like bold, italic to put emphasis on some words. or you could go all crazy about that. The Lions Song (started as a LD entry, now fully released on steam) does a great job with that.
All in all a very solid entry!
Great idea and execution! You made a great use of pages & links to give a feeling of wasted time… While at the same time make it pretty tempting to explore the diversions.
I actually did my best to complete the game asap on my first playthrough, the house part in particular was cool. It made me think the mechanic of "find the shortest path to the end, using clues & common sense" has a lot of potential.
Cool music as well, it was super fitting!
I do like the music. Who made it?
When it comes to the story… Eh. It seems no matter how much time you waste the hare always wins. The tortoise isn't even part of the story as far as I can tell. They don't exist apart from a mention in the intro.
A story with a single character might work sure, but here the hare learns nothing; there's no change in character. In fact there is no character to begin with. The hare is a one-to-one stand-in for the player with no opinions of their own.
I would have liked to see some dialog and exchanges between the tortoise and the hare. Why are they even racing? Are they in it for fame? Is it a publicity stunt? Is there money involved? Are they trying to impress someone? Do they like each other? Is there past rivalry?
The structure is a tried and true non-linear event tree with some loops. The dream sequence stood out and could have been expanded. Maybe the hare could win the race in the dream and then wakes up having wasted the whole day!
For a day I guess you did what you could/wanted. As a story there's not much here.